callorhinus
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Hello!
English is not my native language, and I have to improve it constantly while I converse with zoochatters. But this process is quite slow, and I often forget something like grammar rule before I have a chance to use it, and therefore to remember it better. So I decided to create this thread to have opportunity to learn with the aim, and to have place where advices and corrections are collected
Below is the text I have translated recently. I have marked problem places with numbers. Remarks are after text. Please correct any part of the text because of mistakes or poor text. I also ask any advice on grammar, especially on the use of commas because Russian grammar are not similar to English one.
Yellow-throated marten / Martes flavigula
Yellow-throated marten is the largest and most brightly coloured of all martens of Russia [1]. It has a distinctive coloration and unusual structure of the body/constitution [2]: the body is quite muscular and elongated, with long neck. Tail is long, not very bushy, and head is relatively small. Fell/coat/pelage [3] stays relatively short, shiny, and rough even in winter.
Due to its coloration yellow-throated marten reminds tropical animal [4]. At its core [5], in the Russian fauna this species is just a native of the tropics, as the main area of its habitat covers Indochina, the Malay Peninsula, and the Great Sunda Islands, as well as China, the Korean Peninsula and the foothills of the Himalayas [6].
Animals spend most time on the ground, although they are excellent climbers. They can run very fast and can make leaps of up to 4 meters while jump/jumping [7] from tree to tree. Unlike other martens, yellow-throated marten may hunt not only alone, but in groups of three to five individuals. Animals pursue prey by turn or some hound/hounds [8] it, while others are waiting in ambush. While chasing prey martens make sounds that resemble bark that seems to[9] coordinate their actions. Hunting group breaks by spring.
These bright predators like [10] honey very much. Due to this addiction yellow-throated marten got even a second name "honey dog." [11] Finding wild bees [12], marten necessarily "visits"/sure to visit [13] them and takes away its favorite treat. This sweet tooth extracts honey using its tail: marten inserts it to the beehive, and then licks it [14].
Habitat: temperate and conifer/coniferous forests; swamps and bogs[15]; deserts and treeless mountains
[1] Is phrase “…is…of all…” correct?
[2] What version is more appropriate? Should I say “which version”?
[3]Are these words synonyms? Would it be correct to say “Even in winter pelage stays…”?
[4] Should I move “Due to its coloration” to the end of the phrase?
[5] Do you understand the meaning/sense?
[6] How would you construct this phrase?
[7] How should I construct this part of the phrase?
[8] Is this word correct? Is “some” singular or plural?
[9] Is “that seems to” proper combination of words?
[10] Should I use more suitable word?
[11] Is order “…dog.” (not “…dog”.) correct according to English grammar?
[12] Is this part correct? The meaning should be “after bees are found”
[13] What version is correct/more appropriate?
[14] I don’t like this phrase at all Is there the way to say it better?
[15] Are these words suitable?
Thank you for your help!
English is not my native language, and I have to improve it constantly while I converse with zoochatters. But this process is quite slow, and I often forget something like grammar rule before I have a chance to use it, and therefore to remember it better. So I decided to create this thread to have opportunity to learn with the aim, and to have place where advices and corrections are collected
Below is the text I have translated recently. I have marked problem places with numbers. Remarks are after text. Please correct any part of the text because of mistakes or poor text. I also ask any advice on grammar, especially on the use of commas because Russian grammar are not similar to English one.
Yellow-throated marten / Martes flavigula
Yellow-throated marten is the largest and most brightly coloured of all martens of Russia [1]. It has a distinctive coloration and unusual structure of the body/constitution [2]: the body is quite muscular and elongated, with long neck. Tail is long, not very bushy, and head is relatively small. Fell/coat/pelage [3] stays relatively short, shiny, and rough even in winter.
Due to its coloration yellow-throated marten reminds tropical animal [4]. At its core [5], in the Russian fauna this species is just a native of the tropics, as the main area of its habitat covers Indochina, the Malay Peninsula, and the Great Sunda Islands, as well as China, the Korean Peninsula and the foothills of the Himalayas [6].
Animals spend most time on the ground, although they are excellent climbers. They can run very fast and can make leaps of up to 4 meters while jump/jumping [7] from tree to tree. Unlike other martens, yellow-throated marten may hunt not only alone, but in groups of three to five individuals. Animals pursue prey by turn or some hound/hounds [8] it, while others are waiting in ambush. While chasing prey martens make sounds that resemble bark that seems to[9] coordinate their actions. Hunting group breaks by spring.
These bright predators like [10] honey very much. Due to this addiction yellow-throated marten got even a second name "honey dog." [11] Finding wild bees [12], marten necessarily "visits"/sure to visit [13] them and takes away its favorite treat. This sweet tooth extracts honey using its tail: marten inserts it to the beehive, and then licks it [14].
Habitat: temperate and conifer/coniferous forests; swamps and bogs[15]; deserts and treeless mountains
[1] Is phrase “…is…of all…” correct?
[2] What version is more appropriate? Should I say “which version”?
[3]Are these words synonyms? Would it be correct to say “Even in winter pelage stays…”?
[4] Should I move “Due to its coloration” to the end of the phrase?
[5] Do you understand the meaning/sense?
[6] How would you construct this phrase?
[7] How should I construct this part of the phrase?
[8] Is this word correct? Is “some” singular or plural?
[9] Is “that seems to” proper combination of words?
[10] Should I use more suitable word?
[11] Is order “…dog.” (not “…dog”.) correct according to English grammar?
[12] Is this part correct? The meaning should be “after bees are found”
[13] What version is correct/more appropriate?
[14] I don’t like this phrase at all
Is there the way to say it better?[15] Are these words suitable?
Thank you for your help!
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