Help me with English, please!

Chlidonias said:
you could also put "transport provided to the train station". That should be quite clear to anyone reading it.

If the people have to make their own way to the station, then just put something like "16.20: Return to railway station".
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Thanks a lot!

P.S. Is your avatar from "Neverending story"?
 
Trying to use new words:

Walruses are the biggest pinnipeds in the fauna of Russia. Tusks of the upper jaw are the most prominent feature of walruses. They don't have ear pinnae. Searching for food, the animal dives to the ocean bottom and digs the prey out of the ground with tusks and snout. Walruses spend significant part of their life resting and sleeping. During the mating season, severe fights between males occur. The female gives birth to one calf, twins are rare.
Habitat: ocean and ocean shore (seashore?)
 
The bits in bold is what I would change.

callorhinus said:
Trying to use new words:

Walruses are the biggest pinnipeds in the fauna of Russia. Tusks of the upper jaw are the most prominent feature of walruses. They don't have ear pinnea. Searching for food, the animal dives to the ocean bottom and digs their prey out of the ground with tusks and snout. Walruses spend a significant part of their life resting and sleeping. During the mating season, severe fights between males occur. The female gives birth to one calf, twins are rare.
Habitat: ocean and ocean shore (seashore?)
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Seashore is more commonly used, but ocean shore will work.
 
callorhinus said:
Trying to use new words:

Walruses are the largest pinnipeds in Russia. The Tusks of the upper jaw are the most prominent feature of walruses. Walruses don't have ear pinnae. When Searching for food, the Walrus dives to the Bottom of the Ocean and digs prey out of the ground Using it's tusks and snout. Walruses spend a significant part of their life resting and sleeping. During the mating season, severe fights between males occur. Female Walruses give birth to one Calf usually. Rarely, a female will give birth to twins.
Habitat: ocean and ocean shore
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I fixed it up a bit :D
 
callorhinus said:
Trying to use new words:

Walruses are the biggest pinnipeds in the fauna of Russia. Tusks of the upper jaw are the most prominent feature of walruses. They don't have ear pinnae. Searching for food, the animal dives to the ocean bottom and digs the prey out of the ground with tusks and snout. Walruses spend significant part of their life resting and sleeping. During the mating season, severe fights between males occur. The female gives birth to one calf, twins are rare.
Habitat: ocean and ocean shore (seashore?)
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Walruses are the biggest pinnipeds in the fauna of Russia.
This sentence is fine as it is, but it sounds better (to me) as "Walruses are the biggest pinnipeds in the Russian fauna."

Tusks of the upper jaw are the most prominent feature of walruses.
The tusks of the upper jaw are the most prominent feature of walruses.

They don't have ear pinnae.
This is fine as it is. If you write "Walruses don't have ear pinnae", then you have the previous sentence ending in "walruses" and this sentence starting with the same word, which looks wrong.

Searching for food, the animal dives to the ocean bottom and digs the prey out of the ground with tusks and snout.
When searching for food [or "When feeding," - shorter sounds better], the animal dives to the ocean bottom and digs the prey out of the ground with the [or its] tusks and snout. [Technically the sea floor isn't "ground" (it needs to be on land to be ground), so you can replace "ground" with "sea floor" or "substrate"]

Walruses spend significant part of their life resting and sleeping.
Walruses spend a significant part of their lives resting and sleeping. ["Walruses" is plural, so "their lives"; if singular you would write "The walrus spends a significant part of its life resting..."]

During the mating season, severe fights between males occur.
This is fine, although the comma is not required.

The female gives birth to one calf, twins are rare.
This is fine, but it looks better with a semi-colon instead of a comma, i.e. "The female gives birth to one calf; twins are rare" or "The female usually gives birth to just one calf; twins are rare" - or even as two sentences, "The female usually gives birth to just one calf. Twins are rare".

Habitat: ocean and ocean shore (seashore?).
"Habitat: ocean and shoreline" or "coastline" or just "coast" are probably the best options for words to use there.
 
They don't have ear pinnae.
Also, depending on the intended audience, you might be better writing this as "They have no external ears" or "They do not have external ears" or "They lack external ears", because few people outside zoological circles will know what pinnae means.
 
Chlidonias said:
Searching for food, the animal dives to the ocean bottom and digs the prey out of the ground with tusks and snout.
When searching for food [or "When feeding," - shorter sounds better], the animal dives to the ocean bottom and digs the prey out of the ground with the [or its] tusks and snout. [Technically the sea floor isn't "ground" (it needs to be on land to be ground), so you can replace "ground" with "sea floor" or "substrate"]
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better:

When feeding, the animal dives to the ocean bottom and uses its tusks and snout to dig the prey out of the substrate.
 
Chlidonias said:
better:

When feeding, the animal dives to the ocean bottom and uses its tusks and snout to dig the prey out of the substrate.
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If this is purely a practicing English exercise then it doesn't matter, but otherwise (for example if someone is going to read this information somewhere) you should also state what the prey is.
 
zooboy28 said:
If this is purely a practicing English exercise then it doesn't matter, but otherwise (for example if someone is going to read this information somewhere) you should also state what the prey is.
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This text is a part of larger text from walrus sign, which has usual structure: dimensions, area, diet and other information in the short form is the last part of text.
 
This time I'm almost sure that the grammar is fine - but not words :).

From true seals, fur seals differ in having long flippers. Hind flippers can be turned forward to help support the body, so that all four limbs can be used to traveling on land. Fur seals also have ear pinnae. Most of the time they live in water. They usually eat at night and sleep in the daytime. In summer they aggregate on traditional breeding grounds (rookeries) at islands in North Pacific. In the end of spring males occupy and protect the territory where their harems will be formed, and in summer, during the breeding season, they fight for territory and females. Females give birth to one pup, and they can find their pups among hundreds of pups in the rookery. Red-listed, status: Vulnerable.
 
callorhinus said:
This time I'm almost sure that the grammar is fine - but not words :).

From true seals, fur seals differ in having long flippers. Hind flippers can be turned forward to help support the body, so that all four limbs can be used to [for] travel[l]ing on land. Fur seals also have ear pinnae. Most of the time they live in water. They usually eat at night and sleep in the daytime. [I would combine some of these short sentences with commas or semi-colons for flow but I don't think you have to] In summer they aggregate [congregate] on traditional breeding grounds (rookeries) at islands in [the] North Pacific. In [At] the end of spring [,] males occupy and protect the territory where their harems will be formed, and in summer, during the breeding season, they fight for territory and females. Females give birth to one pup, and they can find their pups among [I would say amongst but I think either is correct] hundreds of pups in the rookery. Red-listed [I think it should be Red List but not completely sure] , [no comma needed] status: Vulnerable.
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I've just made a couple of minor points in square brackets. Very good though :)
 
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LaughingDove nailed it pretty well. The only additional changes I would suggest would be as follows:

From true seals, fur seals differ in having long flippers.
Fur seals differ from true seals in having long flippers.

Most of the time they live in water. They usually eat at night and sleep in the daytime.
They spend most of their time in water. They usually feed at night and sleep in the daytime.

At the end of spring, males occupy and protect the territory where their harems will be formed, and in summer, during the breeding season, they fight for territory and females.
At the end of spring the males occupy and protect the territories where their harems will be formed, and during the breeding season in summer they fight for territory and females. [or "during the summer breeding season"]

Red-listed, status: Vulnerable.
IUCN Red List status: Vulnerable.
 
Next attempt. Would you please explain me a rule for using articles?
Sentence marked with the bold is surprisingly hard for me.

The polar bear is the largest terrestrial carnivore: some males have (a) length up to 3 m and weight up to 1000 kg. It is a fast walker and (an) excellent swimmer. Thick fat layer (layer of fat) and good fur of hollow hairs ensure thermal insulation. Females give birth to 1-2, rarely 3 cubs every 2-3 years in winter in the snow den, which are host up to 3 months. Arctic foxes often follow the polar bears to get some remains of (the) hunted animals.
Limiting factors: poaching, water pollution because of oil production, climate change, diseases.
 
The polar bear is the largest terrestrial carnivore: some males have a body-length up to 3 m and weight up to 1000 kg. [You can also put "a body-length of up to 3m and weight of up to 1000kg"]. It is a fast walker and an excellent swimmer. A thick fat layer ["A thick layer of fat" is also fine] and good fur of hollow hairs ensures thermal insulation ["good fur" sounds strange; I would leave out the word "good"].

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Arctic foxes often follow the polar bears to get some remains of (the) hunted animals. ["the" can be included or not, either way makes sense; personally I would put "to scavenge the remains of prey" or "to scavenge the remains of hunted animals"]
Limiting factors: poaching, water pollution because of oil production, climate change, diseases.


This sentence would be better split in two:
Females give birth to 1-2, rarely 3 cubs every 2-3 years in winter in the snow den, which are host up to 3 months.

I would write it "Females give birth to 1 or 2 cubs - rarely 3 - every second or third winter. The young are born in a snow den, in which they remain for up to 3 months." Something along those lines.
 
Chlidonias said:
A thick fat layer ["A thick layer of fat" is also fine] and good fur of hollow hairs ensures thermal insulation ["good fur" sounds strange; I would leave out the word "good"].

I would write it "Females give birth to 1 or 2 cubs - rarely 3 - every second or third winter. The young are born in a snow den, in which they remain for up to 3 months." Something along those lines.
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Thanks!
Regarding to quoted text: what about "dense fur" instead of "good fur"? Is the word "host" not suitable in this case?


The arctic fox is the only species of Canids which periodically change fur coloration according to season. Arctic foxes are active over the (whole) day and night. They dig long complex underground labyrinth dens with great amount of exits in sandy hills and shore terraces. Arctic foxes tend to form the monogamous pairs during the breeding season. Typical family consists of a male, a female and several pups. Arctic foxes usually have average 5–8 pups, but may be as many as 25 (the largest in the order Carnivora).
Food: small rodents, hares, birds, eggs, fish, carrion, berries and seaweed

How I should change text in bold to avoid saying "arctic foxes" again etc? I feel that second part of this sentence is not correct.
 
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